Okay here’s a real update. The journey feels like it’s finally beginning.
I did do a post on Wednesday, but honestly I just needed to calm down and take it easy on that day. What seemed to help was listening to Ryuichi Sakamoto’s ‘Merry Christmas Mr Lawrence’. I actually listen to this song a lot, and it always seems fitting for what I want to write. I haven’t seen the film, and I wouldn’t have pictured war when I listen to this. Yet, for some reason, this song always reminds me of a characters development and struggle. But, best of all it calms me. (It’s on Spotify by the way, I like this version best.)
On Thursday, I did a lot of thinking, but not much actual work. Nonetheless, I decided that Vera is most likely a story about Faith. My music of choice for the day was Ghost, and Youth.
Now on to Today, where most of the interesting things actually happened. Although in the morning, I wasn’t feeling up to match, I still tried to make use of time with a little reading. At some point I got pumped up enough to work on the Beat Sheet Summary for Act One a little more, and brought it up to 3 pages with all the previous advice I was giving. I’m hoping it won’t go much longer than this, as 3 pages for the first act is quite a bit. I haven’t even done a script yet!
That being said, I went over my notes again and highlighted some important things. Like this quote from Save The Cat:
Liking the person we go on a journey is the most important elements in drawing us into the story.
I think this was my previous gripe with Vera. Despite the encouragement, I didn’t like it or her. I wanted this story to feel personal, but in it’s previous stage I didn’t feel much of anything. I realised, I don’t like Vera. I tried to make her flawed, and imperfect. Too harsh, too something. But I never made her relatable, and I think this is still something I need to work on. Vera just looked like a bad guy right off the bat. I hadn’t “humanised” her. This reminds me of something I said in my second post. That, the likable heroes are caricatures of ourselves, flawed and vulnerable and able to rise above it. Vera isn’t likable, in fact, she’s the kind of person I’d really want to punch in the face. What gives her the right to be an ass?
Needless to say, she needed to be, and still needs to be worked on. So, I set myself a few things I wanted to address in the story.
- Flesh out the relationships. If they don’t feel meaningful in the summary, they’ll barely be meaningful in the script.
- Increase the micro-conflict. A slow beginning is fine, but we need tension. Little drops of conflict that will lead to our downfall. Stories are all about conflict. Without any, no matter how small, there’s no reason to go forward.
- The world needs to be expanded on, the enemy isn’t too clear for the reader and quite frankly to me. I think that says more about me than it does this story.
Lastly, I have some notes I want to end on. By now you may have noticed a really ugly counter in the side bar. This is because I’ve given myself until the 14th to fill this beat sheet, even if it’s roughly. I can’t let myself get stuck polishing nothing, and I can’t let the down days hold me back. We’ve got places to be! It’s easy to lose faith when your story sucks, but I think everything can be salvaged.
Also, I remember creek asked me what my inspirations are. I’m not sure I have too many I want to share for Vera, but my general inspirations are Howl’s Moving Castle, Treasure Planet, Dragon Age Inquisition, Saga, and Fantastic Beasts and Where To Find Them. I’m not sure what this says about me, but I think these are all stories where the characters find themselves and shape their own paths in life.
Oh, and before I go. I’m totally looking for a few people to read the latest version of Act One’s Beat Sheet Summary. Let me know if you’re interested. ❤